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The Ground Training Center of Turkish Airlines supply training for its' ground staff in Commercial, Cargo and Handling as well as its Technical Team in the hangar. It also designs special courses for Managers, Quality teams and Computer Based Training. The Computer Aided Training's objective is to teach the use of computer programs at different levels and develop and maintain existing hardware and software systems within the Training Centre.

There are a variety of over 115 different courses within the Training Center. Not only does our training cover Turkish Airlines staff, but also TK' s travel agencies, other airlines' staff and universities giving courses on Aviation related subjects.

The Ground Training Centre's facilities can accommodate the needs of 500 attendees at the same time, with 21 classrooms and a conference room with 120 seats. 10358 people from different groups trained on its own premises in the year 2000.

A Company wide questionnaire helps to design the training program according to the needs of the departments, on a yearly basis. If there is a requirement for a specific course, then the specialist Instructors in the particular subject will prepare a course to suit these needs.

Turkish Airlines' greatest assets is its' own Human Resources and its major investment is the specific courses that it carries out for the enhancement of the employees with the help of the Training Centre.

The Ground Training Centre is proud of its' history - based on safety, reliability and customer focused services, since 1933. It has had company wide training programs operating for more than 40 years. It is a preferred international training and consulting centre wishing to ensure that all economic and technical participants fully benefit from its' activities. It is able to design the training programs according to the needs of its' customers. The planning method that it undertakes is "Tailor Made to the Customer". 


 

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The Ground Training Center at Turkish Airlines provides training for its ground staff in the Commercial, Cargo and Handling departments, as well as for the Technical Team in the hangar.  It is responsible for designing special courses to meet the needs of  Managers, Quality-Control teams and the Computer-Based Training department.  The objective of our Computer Aided Training program is to teach staff how to use computer programs on a variety of levels and to develop and maintain the existing hardware and software systems at the Center.

The variety of courses offered by the Training Center is astounding - over 115!  Our training courses are designed for not only Turkish Airlines’ staff, but also its travel agencies, staff from other airlines and universities offering courses related to Aviation.

The facilities of the Ground Training Center can accommodate up to 500 attendees at a single event.  The facilities include 21 classrooms and a conference room with a seating capacity of 120. Over 10,000 people from different groups received training on the premises in the year 2000.

A company-wide survey is conducted annually to determine the needs of the different departments and the results are used to design training programs which meet these needs.  If there is a felt need for a specific course, then the specialist Instructors in that particular area will prepare a course to suit these needs.

The greatest assets of Turkish Airlines are its Human Resources and its major investment in the continuing education that the Training Center provides for the enhancement of its employees.

The Ground Training Center is proud of its track record of providing safety, reliability and customer-focused service since 1933. It has been conducting company wide training programs for more than 40 years. It is a preferred international training and consulting center wishing to ensure that everyone regardless of economic or technical status can fully benefit from its activities. It is able to design training programs that suit the particular needs of its customers. The planning method that it utilizes is called "Tailor Made to the Customer".



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